My fist project like this... how does it feel?

i c e wrote on 8/5/2010, 3:30 PM
Hi everybody,
I debuted a video for the opening of a new site that I have been working on a little while back. I didn't really work so I went in a different dirrection. I made this shot little like Docu about the idea/ something/nothing.

It's the first take.. I have a long ways to go on it. The footage doesn't make a lot of sense but I like the feel of it.

This won't be like a trailer, more like a quality explanation for the site.

thanks a lot. any critique of advise is wonderful.



Joshua

Comments

musicvid10 wrote on 8/5/2010, 8:33 PM
dunno, Josh

Your earlier stuff is so down-to-earth, heartfelt, and original.
This effort seems "in the style of", and a bit uncomfortable for you.
As Chef Gordon Ramsey would say, "The presentation is terrific, but where's the heart and soul of the dish?"

The monotone narrative didn't help my impression, either. Cold narrative, stark colorizing, monolithic presentation. it's just not you. The video is actually more interesting with the audio muted.

Others will undoubtedly have divergent opinions, and you should take mine with a grain of salt.

That being said, I'm still a fan. Your hard work and facility with the medium does show through.
i c e wrote on 8/5/2010, 9:18 PM
Hey Musicvid,
thanks a lot for the reply man. I really appreciate it. I think you read my mind. you know I didn't post my usual "please critique" but "do you feel it".

I 100% agree. but when I think about my target audience (18-22's) in this day and age.. i think again
I guess I always want to push my boundaries and get outside my own box, you know?

I really apreciate everything you said. I will be thinking.
take care
Joshua
musicvid10 wrote on 8/5/2010, 9:21 PM
I taught hundreds, no, thousands of today's 18-22 year olds when they were much shorter. And I agree, that is right up their alley.

Getting outside your own box doesn't necessarily mean getting into someone else's.

I would still replace the soundtrack. Good luck with the project!
winrockpost wrote on 8/6/2010, 5:49 AM
Got into the effects box way, way, too much...imho
farss wrote on 8/6/2010, 5:57 AM
" how does it feel?"

Dark, sinister, brooding, depressing.

A hint if I may. You cannot "sell" something by casting negative light on the competition. All the negativity just turns the viewer off....all the message.

Bob.
musicvid10 wrote on 8/6/2010, 9:13 AM
"You cannot "sell" something by casting negative light on the competition."

Unless you're running for public office, in that case it often works all to well . . .
Byron K wrote on 8/6/2010, 11:11 AM
There seems to be a discontinuity with the the quality of the audio. The narration track seems to be overly compressed and highly distorted at times, where as the music clips are much more clear and crisp.

Not sure if it's the mic you're using, you may want to look at the narration track FX and mixer levels and see if they are in the red. To me for the message that you're presenting the audio is more important than the visual.
Derm wrote on 8/6/2010, 6:46 PM
Not mad about the soundtrack, voice is not right also. I agree that attacking the opposition is not the way to go. Dont have any problem with it being downbeat, foreboding etc. I dont think FX are over done, especially for a young audience.
i c e wrote on 8/7/2010, 7:24 AM
Hey thanks a lot eveyone.

I appreciate the time to watch and your advice/comments. I am going to be working on it this week and will conserved everything you guys said

take care all.

Joshua
FilmingPhotoGuy wrote on 8/7/2010, 10:44 AM
Nicely done Joshua, I actually like the well thought out words as well as the mono tone. Because if the vocals were done by a voice over artist then the feeling of urgentness would be lost. I liked the way the theme of the water was portrayed in different ways. The same mono tone was used in the Zeitgeist documentary.
i c e wrote on 8/11/2010, 1:48 PM
Hey, thanks a lot LightAds. Really appreciate it.

take care