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garo wrote on 1/1/2005, 8:34 AM
An assignment that will be about 4,5 minutes but I made a short version to show the client in connection with a price tag for a complete production. Thought I'de run it by youss all here for comments. The narator says that here in eastern Sweden we have a unique nature with many life forms - similar conditions exist for many forms of buisnesses etc ...... you get the drift ... anywho here it is:

http://www.dtours.org/video/onabshort01.mov

Yes we wrote the music for it from scratch.
Ducking ...

//Garo

Comments

rmack350 wrote on 1/1/2005, 10:53 AM
Overall, I think it looks fine.

There are three things at the beginning that grab my attention when they shouldn't. First, the zoom in on the frame is asymetric. The image reaches the left edge long before it reaches the right edge. This is not to say that it couldn't work but it doesn't here, perhaps because the shot itself is very symetrical. Second, in the same shot, there's a pause in the zoom that grabs my attention. Third, the end of the frame move is kind of abrupt and might be better of it slowed to a stop.

After that, everything is fine as far as I can tell. Perhaps if you wanted more "production values" you could try for some different camera angles or moves. I was kind of imagining a high angle for one of the factory shots. I don't think you need anything in the later part of the movie, it looks just fine.

Rob Mack
beerandchips wrote on 1/2/2005, 10:55 AM
I agree with what rmack said. Plus, your music is way too hot. Lower it some. Your on your way though.