"hey, what's that sound?"

couldn't stop lauging when you said 'kick their *ss'. You don't look the type to say it like that.

BTW, breathe a little. other than that, good job.

Ed

Billy Blanks better watch out!

I agree --take a breath once in a while.


Is this for real or is this a paraody?

Sorry I had to ask

Tom

Off Topic, but Tom, give me a call, I have something you might be interested in doing.

yeah problem is I'm up in colorado, so I'm more short of breath here, just moved here from hawaii last year... (any ideas?).. less air up here in the mountains than what I'm used to seaside..

thx for the comments.. :P

Tom, it's for real, it'll be a successful seminar series, coming mid July to Denver.. am getting speakers lined up etc.


ken

Looks really good Ken. Congratulations. The backgrounds are very nice :-)
A few comments though.
If it was me, I'd do away with the turns at the end of some segments as I find them a bit distracting. My (personal) feeling is that the fast dissolves (I'd be tempted to speed up the dissolve a bit more or just use a cut) work much better.
At the 2:00 mark (Hey! What's that tinkling...), I found the zoom out distracting after the other transitions. I'd rather go with a cut/dissolve to your cover shot.
As far as the "kick their ass" line, I'd shoot that scene 3 times. The first time on the cover shot and then tighten it more and more again on the 2nd and 3rd times. On the third time, complete the scene. Then, when you're editing, you'd cut on each word to go from a cover to a medium close-up in 3 quick steps.
Finally, I found the "Denver Colorado" title at the end of the clip a bit hard to read. I'm sure it would stand out on better a TV but on a computer monitor, it's more difficult to make out.

Mike

Ken,

One thing I have noticed in your videos, is that videos in the background are really busy and fast. So this is where the viewer tends to focus. You end up looking almost entirely at the background.

You may be intending that because they other visuals are somewhat dry, but I just want you to be aware of that.

You've obviously attained "master" status in the editing department... I could think of nothing useful to say in that respect.

But my day job has me doing focus groups to evaluate commercials/advertising. If I'd done groups on this one, I think respondents would have said, "Great job, here's some areas to consider:"

1. I'd look at the length with a view to shortening it

2. The talent has become more relaxed since the first one you shared with us... have you considered going the extra mile with an acting coach... I bet he/she would have some invaluable tricks for you (breathing, hand movements, eye movement, etc.)

3. Although I found the toilet humour funny, as a marketer I have to express doubts about its appropriateness in a public message

4. Ditto the comment in the first cut I viewed that said something like, "It's so simple that even my wife got it." I have strong reservations about the effectiveness of a statement like that: although some people may find it funny, a whole bunch more will not and will write off the remainder of your message out of anger.

My (CDN) 2 cents... thanks for sharing.

Pierre

I'd suggest that you did a great job.

I would however agree with Peter about the things he said to consider. (I'm going to school for marketing and in terms of the numbers 3 and 4 : I'd get docked pretty good for those statements for the stated reasons)

Also I would suggest trying for a little more inflection in your voice - you sound excited - but not overly sincere? or something - can't quite put my finger on it, and breathing more might take care of it too).

Dave